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okura the denorian v.1

January 20th, 2011, 5:20 pm

Average Rating: None
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Author's Comments:

Reply typholeon90, January 20th, 2011, 5:20 pm

stuff i need to work on:
-ad a bang.
-make better shading on the shirt.
-recolor him black

this is gonna be the main character of my new comic, but i need help for making the sprite.

random spoiler about the comic: he going to have some sort of a rival girl named "leviathan the denorian" she still have no sprites, if you wanna know more about these two guys, just meet leviathan on the chat tonight and onaku tomorrow.

C+C,help and advice will be nice.

also i fogot, im trying to make him look more like a minor edit to fit with evryone else in the comic.

lets me quess what gonna be your critism ? ITS SUCKS !

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User's Comments:

Reply Lady Darkrina, January 21st, 2011, 3:58 am

The dark red line between the grey and red area of your character should be erased, the shirt needs to be a bit more shaded and the pants need a bit more creases.

Reply Kazzythehedgehog, January 22nd, 2011, 2:01 am

This is pretty good, but make the quills look more like an edit, you know, to bump him into the minor edit...

Very creative, but what is a Denorian?


Overall mark 9/10 for Creativeness, 8/10 for edit-like looking, and as Lady
Darkrina suggests, a bit more shading on shirt and a few more creases in pants...

Overall achievment 17/20

(Hope this gets us in a better aquaintances :D)

Reply jeffreyex, January 22nd, 2011, 2:24 am

need more shading on the head
quils looks weird cause it has a a very red outline on the head too.
Bad shading on the quils
pants needs more lightsource
head has no lightsource
shirt has a bad contrast
pants outline sucks
like the shirt
Muzzle has a bad color for a hedgehog
Overall
1/10

you have failed me saumon

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